Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The modern world has brought many unique challenges and changes and as people are entering into such era, they need to be capable of making well-informed decisions. As humans mature, they learn to develop many skills in order to overcome different problems. Traveling to other parts of the globe is an appropriate approach to gain knowledge. I believe traveling to other countries is more advantageous for people which allows them to know about other cultures and people's lifestyles. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, living experience in this modern world has become increasingly challenging and sometimes people face many difficulties. In order to solve those problems properly and accurately, people need to be equipped with useful knowledge. They need to learn and develop several skills to be better prepared. Such skills can be gained from various valuable resources and one invaluable experience is traveling, specially to foreign countries. Traveling allows people to learn about other cultures and languages and even different lifestyles which is definitely an amazing experience. My own experience is a compelling example of this fact. Last year I moved to Sydney, Australia and I have been living here for nearly 1 year. I work as a software developer and being in this great city has given me numerous opportunities. I have met new people and I have found many good friends. I participated in many workshops and I have learned a lot since I started my career. I have been able to improve my English skills specially by talking to native speakers. Overall, this has been a great experience in my life.
In addition, another significant point to indicate is that people usually are familiar with cultures and lifestyles within their own borders. Students have been taught about many things about their countries and as people in the same country have the same language and similar lifestyle, it may not be very interesting for them to travel in their countries. Moreover, people may have more fun when they go to another country as there many tourist attractions in other parts of the world. They meet new people and they can live together for a while and do some group activities such as cooking and playing sports which can be absolutely pleasurable. For example, I have a close friend in Sydney and we meet each other at least twice a week. Last week, we went to some areas called Blue Mountains for camping. We spent 3 nights there and we cooked our own food and played many games and enjoyed the nature. That was a wonderful experience.
In conclusion, there are many ways that people can increase their knowledge and use other people's experiences. Traveling is definitely a great way to gain useful skills as well as practical knowledge. I profoundly believe people would benefit more from visiting other countries and this can become an invaluable and memorable experience as they can meet new people and know about other cultures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 884, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ple and I have found many good friends. I participated in many workshops and I ha...
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Line 3, column 969, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...earned a lot since I started my career. I have been able to improve my English sk...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01212121212 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73175389427 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4913428864 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6071428571 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6785714286 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53571428571 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167573576301 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436927096054 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460963683309 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116715091649 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253871835227 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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