Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Living experience has become increasingly challenging in this modern world and humans need to overcome many issues properly. They need to be equipped with necessary tools and knowledge in order to succeed and enjoy the life. Personally, I believe people who prefer to take risks by learning new approaches to problem solving can do better and be more successful than people who do the same things. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, as humans are experiencing new changes that the modern world has brought to their lives, they may feel the need to change. In general, people need to develop many useful skills and enhance their potential abilities in order to be capable of managing their lives properly and accurately. Sometimes they they are faced with difficult situations which require them to make well-informed decisions using alternative methods. For example, there are many unpredicted issues that happen such as financial crisis or natural disasters. Moreover, people may need to change their jobs to find a well-paid position which require more skills and responsibilities. In such situations, people may have to take riskier actions to achieve higher goals. If they accept to walk down that path, they might be able to make more money and enjoy the life better. For example, I was offered a job at a well-known company in Sydney, Australia. I had several doubts about leaving my previous position and moving to a new country. Finally, after many hours thinking about the consequences, I decided to accept the job and right now I am enjoying a successful career.
In addition, another significant point to mention is that working in a company for several years and doing the same thing over and over again can become extremely boring after some time. The main reason is a human's mind need to try new patterns and approaches to extract useful information to continue working properly. So, making a change in life can help people's minds to thrive. Moreover, this can bring more pleasure and fun into their lives as they try new things and become happier. My own experience is a compelling example of this matter. Once I change my previous job as a software developer, I was introduced to a big community of amazingly talented people who work in the same industry. There are many workshops and online course provided by those people which have helped me to improve my skills and utilize more effective techniques to create better software solutions. As a result, I am satisfied with my decision and I am enjoying a successful career as well.
In conclusion, people need to develop many skills and improve their potential abilities in order to compete for better positions. Moreover, they should not rely on their current skills and should take risks which might give them new opportunities and make them more successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...ives properly and accurately. Sometimes they they are faced with difficult situations whi...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds thriving'.
Suggestion: minds thriving
...aking a change in life can help peoples minds to thrive. Moreover, this can bring more pleasure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99579831933 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69515135576 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497899159664 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8521949902 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0833333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179585575834 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484686249272 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494337911897 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118676745499 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413295006439 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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