Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Humans are social creatures who need to interact and communicate with other people in order to benefit from such relationships. There are many different cultures around the globe which people can learn many things from. Traveling is not only a useful means by which people can study other cultures, but it is also enjoyable and interesting. In my opinion, traveling to different countries have more advantages for people than just visiting their own countries. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, as humans are entering a new era they will face many challenges and changes the modern world has brought. People need to learn and develop many skills and improve their potential abilities in order to be able to demonstrate their true capabilities and manage those issues properly and accurately. On way of learning new skills is by traveling around the world. Although, visiting various parts of their home countries can be beneficial, being able to talk to other people with various cultural backgrounds has more advantages. Traveling to foreign countries allow people to know about many opportunities such as learning about education options for students or new successful businesses in a certain industry. My own experience is a compelling example of this fact. I have been living in Sydney, Australia for the past year and since I came here, I made many new friends and also I was introduced to the latest advances in Information Technology industry. I am a software developer and this opportunity allows me to think about a business of my own that some day I may be able to establish and succeed in life. Moreover, I have been able to learn many constructive techniques and approaches for software development. For this reason, I truly believe, visiting a foreign country has many benefits for people.
In addition, another significant point to be mentioned is that people may have more fun if they have the opportunity to go on a trip to another country. When people grow up in their own home country, they will be familiarised with their attractions in that country, for instance by traveling or by studying different living experiences of their own people. But, if they may not be familiar be other types of cultures around the world. This can be more enjoyable for them because they get know other people with different lifestyle and they can have quality time with them, for instance, by trying various kinds of food or enjoying the night life in some countries. For example, my brother went to Japan last year and he absolutely enjoyed the lifestyle of Japanese people. He had went to many restaurants and tried food which he did not believe he could even taste them. He made some friends over there during that period and they went camping and fishing which was a valuable experience.
In conclusion, people need to know about other cultures and lifestyles in other parts of the world. This can help them learn many things and enjoy their time. I profoundly believe people will benefit more from visiting other countries than their own home countries because it can be both amusing and informative for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...efit from such relationships. There are many different cultures around the globe which people ...
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Line 5, column 781, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
...he lifestyle of Japanese people. He had went to many restaurants and tried food whic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95265151515 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69131853351 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452651515152 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4702173029 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.12 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207359850053 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662639314502 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701986018903 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160524808957 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559911466993 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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