Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think that we should always stay with others to have good relationships because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
As a social human being, cultivating relationships is an inevitable part of our life. In this regard, some people, according to their attitudes, contend that maintaining some distances or short breaks, whereby people can realize how worthy their relationship is, is of great significance in relationships. Nonetheless, others’ view is that by staying always near the people with whom they want to have close bonds, they can be connected more frequent and foster strong ties. As far as I am concerned, the first option seems preferable, and in what follows, the reasons and examples corroborating my viewpoint will be elaborated.
First and foremost, being away from others provides a great opportunity for individuals to think thoroughly about their relationships, reminding them of the memories that have been forgotten. Take my personal experience as an example. My partner and I were in a predicament so that we found it difficult to tolerate living close together. As a result, we decided to live separately for a while to think more about the future of our relationship. In those days, I was consistently thinking about seconds of my life that could have been spent with him. I imagined myself in our home while we were talking about our daily events. I remembered how he was trying to help me when I embarked on writing my master’s thesis. At that time, every tiny detail in our relationship had become significant to me. Indeed, this short distance reminded me of his undeniable impact on my life and therefore motivated me to call him and try to recover our relationship. Thus, I realized that had not been away from him for a short period, I would not have been aware of how valuable he is for me, and even I would have ruined our loving relationship.
Furthermore, when people are always accessible in their relationships, they cannot find out how invaluable their presence is. Therefore, always staying with others not only does not strengthen their ties but also may prevent them from perceiving the merits of a wonderful relationship. As a case in point, before emigration to Canada, I had been living with my parents for about 22 years during which I was almost always in my bedroom either studying or chatting with my friends via my smartphone. I can remember a typical day in which my mother was preparing delicious meals for me while my father was going out to purchase my allergy medicine. Despite all of their kindnesses and considerations, I preferred spending time with my friends to spending it with my family. The situation has changed since I emigrated to a country far more away from my hometown. Owing to my emigration, I have found out how my family bonds are noteworthy. If there had not been any distance between us, I would not realize how their presence is impressive and that they are the most precious asset in my life.
In conclusion, I do believe that it is not a necessity to be always near the people with whom you desire to have a special bond. This is because short breaks not only can help you think deeply about your relationships but also can make you aware of the importance of others’ presence in your life by making a comparison in your mind between your current conditions and former ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 97.0 43.0788530466 225% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2708.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85304659498 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92256051292 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503584229391 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6999892542 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.833333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286036671663 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081332778554 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568630893837 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178741702642 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429655344939 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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