Some people think that we should not limit the time students (6-12-year-old) spent on technology products. Others think that because technology products are harmful, they should be limited to less than one hour. Which do you prefer, why?
Recently with the advent of technology, the phenomenon of the amount of time that children allocate to technology has sparked a heated debate. In this connection, some people believe that technology commodities affect a child's life. Although contested by many that the matter of eliminating the time that kids spend on technology objects is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that children should be limited to work with modern equipment, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
Firstly, dedicating a considerable amount of time to high-tech machines decreases their brain performance. To be more specific, they waste their time because they cannot gain valuable knowledge; however, a schoolchild will improve their information if they spend their time on their lessons. According to my own experience, my son played with his tablets for a long time, so he could not focus on completing his assignments. Since he became addicted to playing games, he finished his tasks quickly to spend more time on playing with tablets; hence, he answered his homework incorrectly. Because there is a direct correlation between motivation and innovation, he was not able to solve the problem whose solutions required creativity. When I have punished him and taken his tablets, his brain efficiency has enhanced because there is nothing to disturb his attention.
Secondly, if students dedicate their time to modern machines without restrictions, their social skills will become reduced. To elucidate, students who become interested in technology tools do not tend to communicate with others, which seems a difficult situation for them as they do not experience this. For example, my little sister plays with a computer all the time, so she is always in her room alone, and our family bonding becomes weak. That she does not spend time in society, she does not learn communication skills, so unable to build a relationship. Thus, spending a tremendous amount of time working with apparatus alone is harmful to her social interaction.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that kids should allocate limited time to modern products. Not only do technology products diminish their productivity, but they also make them an introverted person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y also make them an introverted person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.327176781 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92747600754 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585751978892 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.195230578 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.764705882 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182306193524 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590848627047 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431013097798 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12540784405 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485808912607 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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