Some teenagers participate in different activities in school, but others focus only one activity that is important for them. Which idea do you prefer?
Nowadays, educational issues of children are potential and vital priorities of any government and annually devote a significant amount of their budget on this issue, since juveniles and children are important human resources of any given society, as far as the success and development f societies are concerned. With this in mind, there is a fierce controversy among people and families as to whether their young adults should select a wide variety of activities in school or focus only specific areas. As far as I am concerned, the privileges of the diverse activities outweigh those of single area for several conspicuous reasons which can be elaborated upon separately.
To begin with, choosing multiple activities can be beneficial for students especially they can bring first-hand experiences which might be crucial for their future life. It is crystal clear that each activity has its own hardships and tranquility and people can undergo the winning or failure conditions. In this regard, some students may experience some failures during their games and occupations. They will learn that although it can be intensively hard at firs face, but the failure can fire their enthusiasm and lead them toward the upcoming successes. In other words, failures and defeats can be considered as a blessing in disguise and convert the past defeats into the stepping-stone to the future victories. In single activity, however, students have less chance to undergo the possible defeats which result in less and genuine gratifications and mirth. Moreover, taking different activities might lead children to accepting their own responsibilities and liabilities in the future, since today's educations in different areas can be a great panacea in transcending the drawbacks of education because of disabilities in learning practical trainings efficiently.
Secondly, engaging in diverse activities can lead children toward the healthy and wholesome lifestyles in compared to those children with only one job in the school. Unequivocally, in this environment, children are provided with the great chance to communicate with various group of people with diverse beliefs, thoughts, and tastes. Accordingly, if they want to have a eminent contributions in their team and really feel importance in it, they should interact and socialize with different people. Thus, in this situations fulfilling the desires and ideals of the parents in becoming their children communicative and sociable individuals would not be far-fetched and they can prepare for the future conveniently. Additionally, children can flourish their latent talents and do their best to nurture them and pursue those fields in the future according to their discoveries in the school.
In summary, by taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that in spite of possible merits of single activity, this kind of action fails to meet the needs of the children for experiencing healthy lifestyles and awareness in various fields especially for the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in summary, kind of, in other words, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49253731343 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06454969785 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535181236674 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2770348499 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.0 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3125 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9375 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175852292445 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615533946858 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04217623782 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103192900595 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387861628068 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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