People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Since the dawn of humanity, human beings are pursuing the paths that lead them to the zenith of advancement and transform their efforts to fruitful results in the upcoming moments. In this route, people through proper planning as well as making an intellectual balance between their working times and enjoyments shape their desires and ideals according to their living conditions, cultural and religious beliefs, and their own personality in the life. Presently, there exists a controversy as to whether people are more engaged in what makes them busy, or they are searching to the amusements in today's modern world. while some believe this fact that in the today's era of economic crisis, people have no time to spend it to their families and enjoyment, but I agree with the statement, among which advent of vast range of entertainments, deformation of people's attitude toward the world, and needing to mental calm have significant importance.
First, with the passage of time more amusement and technology are offered that can be tempting to the people, even for those of humans that had led to the useful future. Facilities and technology are two-edged swords which not only cannot be considered as a proper solution for people's requirements but also have adversely affected human's attributes. In this modern era, social networks have great influences on the people's life and as experts and psychologists demonstrate the origin of most conflicts in the families and societies are resulted from inappropriate utilization of internet, television, cell phone, to name but a few. On the other hand, it can obviously be seen that the most cell phone applications are followed by millions of people from various points of world in less time. Therefore, technology has been a widespread tool for enjoyment of people from ranges of age and led the young adults in any society to the hollow objectives.
From other points of view, people have lost their impetus in many environments and young stratum of a society without any innovation and encouragement from governmental organizations do not want think to the advancement of his or her family in particular and the society in general. While several years ago, the mean of life was this definition that each person has great deal of responsibility about the society in which live there as well as they had this belief that they should be a beneficial person to the society and fulfill its needs, but people due to their being addiction to the modern and attractive enjoyments such as video games, social networks, and so forth, show less motivations in leading the country to the progress. So, our world is fraught with unfettered joys.
To sum up, with all this taken into account, people have engaged themselves in virtual world and pursue those of enjoyments that have no contributions in modifying not only their personality but also the soul of the society. Their commitments has been diminished due to the low deal of motivations. The thoughtful politicians in some countries are pursuing the important and flexible solutions to this catastrophic events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in general', 'in particular', 'such as', 'as well as', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259515570934 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.117647058824 0.158761421928 74% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10553633218 0.0866891130778 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0415224913495 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0397923875433 0.0685040099705 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13321799308 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0397923875433 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95258962051 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346020761246 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00173010380623 0.00188951952338 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.0951557093426 0.0887237588012 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00692041522491 0.0209618222197 33% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121107266436 0.0139019557991 87% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3149.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 510.0 408.028673835 125% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17450980392 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364705882353 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.270588235294 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203921568627 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.158823529412 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95258962051 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 64.898901477 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 34.0 20.5533526081 165% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.082012907 48.84282405 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 209.933333333 120.699889404 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0 20.5533526081 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 61.0588235294 45.7405998639 133% => OK
Elegance: 2.17391304348 1.45489161554 149% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0921882483023 0.300154397459 31% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.133953881929 0.103427244359 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0706708258269 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.588948883667 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.172147875562 0.151897553556 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455759926613 0.114077575197 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298532921568 0.0781384742642 38% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.532655717954 0.336927656856 158% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0145550736575 0.067059652881 22% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699995155885 0.210909579961 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220661330465 0.0618886996521 36% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30