Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
Life is rife of ups and downs. Everyone confronts both joyfulness and hardship in the life and it is crystal clear that people are pursuing those of moments that gifts them a brilliant and astonishing success in near future and possession of glad life is the purpose of them. With this in mind, there exists a controversial discussion about the issue that people whether or not people should extend their social activities in order to reach happiness in the life. As far as I am concerned, one's occupation will have a significant impact on people's delightfulness than the social life for several reasons, among which achieving to the great progresses, having an appropriate economic situations, and creating a stable relationships with co-workers are of conspicuous ones.
Without any shadow of doubt, achieving a prosperous future is the ultimate goal of each person in the life. Gaining a proper job is a pivotal juncture in everyone's life to pave the way towards the success and modification. In this regard, the job not only reveals one's latent talents but also conducts him or his to the brilliant future. Furthermore, statistics approve the fact that those of people who experience an occupation bring important and unmatched lessons in the life so that they can apply these experiences to other realms of their life and create a delightful and hopefulness moments among the family members. In contrast, this is not true for social activities such as watching movies with one friend, whose delight is superficial and short-lived.
Economics is base of all activities in each society so much so that without this vital facet in the society, the country encounter with diverse detriments, which not only leads the society toward the disintegration threat but also puts the people in mental and spiritual diseases. Accordingly, evolving in a job gets a salary monthly without any dependency to others so that families can afford their daily demand through that. Therefore, people can supply their desires and all things what they want. In addition, through saving a portion of the money, they expense them in emergency conditions such as hospital treatments, or spending in their children's future. Indeed, money plays a crucial role in creating a glad times in the life and prevents humans from the stress and pressure.
Last but not least, although some people may assert that avoiding social activities put them in seclusion occasions and weaken their communications, pursuing the social communications in the work office can introduce the best and long lasting friendships. In fact, the half time of each person passes in work places, so whether he or she wants or not must adapt the behavior to the social environments. From psychologists points of view, those of humans who make a friends in the job suppose them as a reliable and helpful ones, which not only can they account for their helps in trouble situations, but also they have the chance that get progress and improvement in their personal life through sharing ideas, and making funs. Consequently, at work, one can kill two birds with one stone: doing his or her job efficiently and creating a social content with others, which is not in a social activity simultaneously.
In conclusion, by taking into account all the above reasons, I believe that a person's job will play an important role in building a happiness and delightful life than a social activity. This is because they can achieve to the true improvements as well as blossom their aptitudes, getting progress in the economical contexts, and finding reliable friends. As a final word, work is fundamental factor in construction of one's personality according to the cultures socially acceptable in the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'situation'?
Suggestion: situation
...gresses, having an appropriate economic situations, and creating a stable relationships wi...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'relationship'?
Suggestion: relationship
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a friend' or simply 'friends'?
Suggestion: a friend; friends
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255952380952 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.108630952381 0.158761421928 68% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967261904762 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047619047619 0.046263068375 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0431547619048 0.0685040099705 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142857142857 0.118717715034 120% => OK
Participles: 0.0327380952381 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8657113069 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0133928571429 0.0309702414327 43% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.11755952381 0.0887237588012 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0178571428571 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014880952381 0.0139019557991 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3746.0 2387.08602151 157% => OK
No of words: 616.0 408.028673835 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.08116883117 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.48200974243 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.37987012987 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.280844155844 0.251872472559 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189935064935 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133116883117 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8657113069 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 315.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 64.67581371 59.2087087015 109% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 29.3333333333 20.5533526081 143% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0468538428 48.84282405 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.380952381 120.699889404 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.5533526081 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 57.4177489177 45.7405998639 126% => OK
Elegance: 2.16417910448 1.45489161554 149% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0596455311245 0.300154397459 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0982358409597 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0414428948851 0.0752933317313 55% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.543060529768 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119034630707 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319629282201 0.114077575197 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283979886467 0.0781384742642 36% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.524008677179 0.336927656856 156% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0485250047411 0.067059652881 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0497980042275 0.210909579961 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205342193967 0.0618886996521 33% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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