Some teenagers take part in different kinds of activities such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support?
Education is one of the most essential activities in our lives. Every person learns something from the day of his birth till the judgment day. Our emotions, feeling and memories very much depend on the knowledge we have. Because of its importance, many people argue, whether it is beneficial for the teenagers to attend in many activities or only in the most significant ones. I think that taking part in many activities has more advantages for the two main reasons I would try to present in the following essay.
The first reason is that not every person, spatially teenagers, know what is their main interest and what they are willing to do the most. Attending to many classes can help someone who is still confuse to find their affection. History knows many successful people, who did not knew their passions, but later because of the big spectrum of their interests found their true identity. One of the most known examples is Adam Driver, an American actor who started his adult life as a marine, but later he got serious injury and had to leave his survey and start a new life. Fortunately, since he was a teenager he adored the theater and wanted to become an actor. He remembered his teenage dream and followed it. Now he is one of the most successful actors in the Hollywood.
The second reason is that lots of knowledge is giving a person to look outside of the box and be more creative and adroit. In twenty first century trends change dramatically fast. In the era of the technologies nobody even the best marketers and businessmen can not predict what exact quality would be needed the most in twenty and even maybe ten years. For the new generations it is crucial to master as many skills as possible. In the 17th century something like this has already happened. When the first fabrics were established, enormous number of the simple citizens had lost their jobs. History has remembered that time as one of the brightest times in our modern society, when n realty many people were starving because of the extreme lack of money.
In a nutshell, I think that both of the options have their objective pros and cons. However, learning many subjects is more beneficial for the youngsters
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73246753247 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50953990229 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3878004098 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7619047619 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.080880666753 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0242573161366 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349166313576 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0452959422354 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486726979717 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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