At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus, such as how many hours that the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, students almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why.
Undoubtedly, the new policies which are directly related to students on campus could affect to their performance and standard of life. Each university has their own way to make the best setting for students. Some propose that undergraduate should involve in making decision regarding the matters that influence to their daily life in campus while others think opposite. Personally speaking, I believe that this circumstance should be decided by the experienced people. To support this stance, following explanation will elaborate on my perspective.
To begin with, the experts have advanced and intensive knowledge to make right decision without bias. These are a group of people related in many different of fields such as psychology, management or even finance works together. Their plans consider in many aspects such as health, time, or even money to make it the most efficient for students. For example, if the disciples want to study all night, it can damage to their body, or the cafeteria only serve fast food on the morning. Moreover, it’s not only advantageous for students but also for university. Besides making these decisions, they provide detailed instruction or description to assist the university to adjust the plan independently based on students’ comments. Therefore. hiring experienced people can help university make right decisions associated with students’ daily life.
Moreover, it’s really difficult for administrator to decide who is the representative students to make decisions. The committee in university has to sit together to overview who are the students to embody the community. It wastes an amount of time and money to make the right choice without associating with any benefits. Therefore, the university is really hard to make it right.
To wrap it up, the university should invite the experienced people to decide the matters related to students’ life. It provides the perfect policy with the full advantages for students and the authorities are really difficult to choose the suitable students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50156739812 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01973475123 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3484809374 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.5 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196477136953 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617845603184 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435691787477 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118784682064 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553487765057 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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