Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
personally, I would prefer to live with my family for longer time. I have been living with them since i was born and I see no reason to change that any time soon espcially with the responsiblity that comes with being a young adult. I feel this way for few reasons which we can explore in the following essay.
To begin with, leaving with families allows you to have an accomodation or shelter for rent free. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of one of my cousins. My cousin name is Khairat, she used to feel leaving with her parent does not enable her all the freedom she wants. When she turned eighteen, she moved out of her parents house, got an apartment and paid for it with the money she got from her last summer job. She was unable to get a stable job which would enable her to keep up with the payment of her rent. Eventually, the landlord had to evict her from the apartment because of her inability to pay her rent.
furthermore, leaving with families allows you to worry less or not at all about utility bills. When you leave with families, bills such as electricity, water, internet, gas, and even feeding are taken care of. But when you leave alone, beyond the house rent, you also need to pay for utility bill. A good example i would still like to make use of is that of my cousin Khairat. When she moved out of her parents house, thinking that all she had to pay was the house rent but the reality came to her when she got her apartment and there was no light, water or internent. She approached her landlord to complain only to be told she needs to pay those utilities separatly. My cousin couldn't charge her phone, an interviewer called her for a job but couldn't reach her because her phone was switched off. My cousin did not loss only that job opportunity, she also lost her apartment and the freedom she wanted because she had to move in back with her parent. This time, her parent were not interested in giving her any form of freedom because she has failed when she was given one.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that living with families longer as a young adult better than wanting independence from parents early.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, still, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46347607053 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33766719835 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506297229219 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5501530776 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2631578947 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17391875582 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783386645212 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876970655751 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196053868966 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123062046935 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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