Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, young people are in the dilemma ABOUT whether to live with their parents or to find a new house away from their family in order to get independence. In regards with this, I believe that living with parents have myriad of advantages such as financial and mental support, more time for study and healthy meals, thus I would prefer living with parents for a longer time.
First of all, it cannot be denied that the financial support an offspring would receive when he/she would choose to live with parents. These days you have to pay for everything if you have to live by yourself, from the rent of the place till the grocery that you would require which I think is very expensive if you are a student or a young adult. By way of example, I can relate my situation when I moved to Melbourne for my Masters', at the time I struggled to pay my bills and even buying basic grocery, as I was a student.
In addition to the financial support, one would also get more time for their study and exam preparation as they would not to worry much about other house managements. When a person
stays with the family he/she does not have to worry about due dates of bills, maintaining the house, cooking and washing the dishes. In fact, because of this one could save much of his/her time and invest the same time for school work. Not to mention, one can get healthy meals and decent sleep at night that are very much important in students' life.
Finally, it is certainly not true to claim that if someone is living with his/her parents would not have any independence or privacy for that matter. Although I was living with my parents till the end of my graduation, they always respected my space, privacy and my decisions, also they hardly ever interfered in my personal matters. I think
this must be the case in most of the students' house who are living with their family, so it is not fair to claim that one would not develop independence if he/she is living with parents.
By way of conclusion, on the basis of all the points discussed and by my personal experiences as well, I would like to state that young adults will be benefitted more if they would choose
to live with their family as they will not only receive financial and mental support but there are also other factors that are essential in younger's life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, thus, well, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50588235294 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32396987635 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454117647059 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2747014441 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.307692308 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6923076923 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287029698785 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107439178533 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739715655636 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135277977119 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731139358066 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.47 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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