Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and exam- ples to support your opinion.
Families are important for every person. Families prepare the person for real life. Until person become adult, family of the person také care of person. Some people states that young adults should stay with their families for a longer time; others disagree. In my view, person should not stay with their families for a longer time. The reasons are as follows.
First, person can not gain real life experience while living with their families. Someone who live with their parents, obiviously do not pay the bills or do no make cook. When young adult become older and started to live along, this person can be struggle. For example, when I was studying in university, one of my friend was living with their parents. After he graduated, he moved to Japon for business. However, he could not live in the Japon, because hi had no idea about even how real life works.All in all, for gaining real life expreience, every person should leave from their familiy house and should start to live alone.
Second, person should leave their comfort zone as soon as posibble. Living with a family is classic comfort zone example. Comfort zone is which is the place person always feel comfortable. If person want to be succesfull in life, person have to leave their comfor zone. For example, one of my friend started to live alone when he was a teenager. Living from comfort zone is very hard in such a young age. However, after these hard times now he is very succesfull person. All in all, in order to be succesfull people should live their comfort zone as soon as posibble.
To sum up, some people may oppose the idea that young adult should live thier comfort zone as soon as posibble. Not only it is required for understand life but also leaving from comfort zone has significant good effects to the person. No matter what, every family should encourge their children to leave their house as soon as posibble.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73273273273 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19823922245 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468468468468 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0638703111 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.5217391304 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4782608696 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275821290992 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102041261088 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696191931048 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195453989452 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412501440686 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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