Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

It is well-known that most children love to practice and play sports. Most parents are quite happy about this because sports activities have many benefits for their chid’s development and progress. However, spending various hours practicing sport could bring negatives consequences like lost their focus on their schoolwork. In my opinion, everything has pros and cons; the important thing is finding a proper balance.

On the one hand, practicing sport helps children in their body development and their future. It is a proven fact that the number of children with extra weight has increased in the last years. As a consequence, many children develop several issues in their joins or early heart problems. Between 10 and 16 years old is a delicate period for children, and practicing any activity would reduce their possibility of contracting some diseases. Another advantage is that outstanding athletes could apply for scholarships in the future. Universities have a full scholarships offer for athletes. In other words, they could have more opportunities in their studies and jobs.

On the other hand, during the school period children have to pay attention to studying. Actually, they face many other school activities that are beneficial for their future such as music, math, and other subjects. If they are immersing in sports many hours a day, they could lose their focus on schoolwork, which may be the most critical responsibility at this age. Consequently, investing spare time in sport could negatively impact other areas, and they could avoid any subject that could involve a different future.

In conclusion, while we should encourage our children to participate in sport, we also keep in mind that they should also focus on schoolwork. I am convinced that a balance between sport and study is the best direction for children during this period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'scholarship'?
Suggestion: scholarship
...in the future. Universities have a full scholarships offer for athletes. In other words, the...
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Line 7, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve a different future. In conclusion, while we should encourage our children t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, however, if, may, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25752508361 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78245191866 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571906354515 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2756852003 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5882352941 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195757840474 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670222028272 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491168975918 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1257481352 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384500179832 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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