sports and social activies, classes and libraries
I certainly agree that sports and social activities deserve the equal financial support as the classes and libraries do. For a very long time, we have been focusing too much on classes and libraries investments and ignoring that sports and social activities are just as important as knowledge education for any individual's development. So, I believe that universities and colleges should support sports and social activities financially as well.
To start with, sports develop both students' physical strength and social skills. Physical health is the very basis of a person's daily activities and we cannot function well without strong health. Doing sports games stimulate muscles exercise and movement and strengthen our bodies' coordinate capacity. Sports also are very helpful for brain development, which could be beneficial to other subjects study. Sports are also a practice of social skills and cooperation, which would really be needed for a good college life and in the future career. However, except some old playground and few sports ground, like basketball, pingpong ball and badmiton, we didn't really have many choices when it comes to football, velleball or a gym and other neccessary facilities. So I definitely advocate colleges and universities should invest more on sports.
Secondly, social activities are indispensable part of campus life because we are all social beings. If we only focus on classes and reading and writing in the libraries, we wouldn't be happy but overwhelmed. Social activities, such as clubs, parties, concerts, movies, hiking, trips, would really connect us with more and more students and teachers whom we can develop relationships with. If we encounter with any difficulty and problem, we could feel comfortable to reach out and get suggetions and help. The reality is schools are obviously focus on academic, which is seen as the most imortant althrough the college life. Some universities have many libraries but we cannot see one movie theater, which is not a good balance at all.
Although I argue sports and social activities should receive equal financial investment, I didn't mean schools should cut down the support for classes and libraries. Because as students it is true that most of our time and effort should put into study and take each class seriously and make the best use of libraries to reach a best academic achivement as possible as we can.
To conclude, take consideration of strengthen students phyiscal states and enrich their campus life and develop well-rounded graduates, I agree that college and university should support sports and social activites equally in financial comparing with classes and libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...s. Physical health is the very basis of a persons daily activities and we cannot function...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'focused', 'focussed'.
Suggestion: focused; focussed
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Suggestion: didn't
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as, it is true, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 37.0 13.8261648746 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32705882353 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79217492834 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536470588235 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6058358095 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.157894737 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301903475997 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103957630213 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915533550978 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197055244244 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893008259671 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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