Agree or disagree? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
I certainly disagree with this statement that success in future job is more rely on relating well to people and studying hard in school is less important. Even though in a job, the capacity that we communicate with people, deal with things in a high emotional intelligence is very important, schooling influence for a person is lifetime, which is not only on an individual's job, but more importantly on everybody's mind, spirit, characters, habits and knowledge.
To start with, studying hard in school cultivates students' good habits and characters. When we in the appropriate age to get a job, most of our habits are already formed in the period of schooling. According to a research, professionals who studied hard in school or who are on the top of the class usually considered are willing to work hard and smarter than those who cannot behave well in school. Employers are more inclined to choose those hard-working students applicants. Because good habits of doing things well and good character of taking responsibilities is very important in a career.
Secondly, studying hard in school cultivates students' ability to solve problems. Schooling life is not only about obtain various and bottomless knowledge, but we are learning how to deal with problems and how to relate to others around us too. The way to test how well or how much we learned from every half or every semester is to take a test or writing a paper. In the process, we have to know what the shortcomings or difficulties lie, and try to work on with it in order to get good grade. In a job, the way to test how much work or how well we do is performance but not how well we relate to people.
Admittedly, it is necessary for us to improve skills when it comes to maintain good relationships with people and it is truly helpful for the career. But which is more important? The undoubted answer is latter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'high emotional intelligence'.
Suggestion: high emotional intelligence
...nicate with people, deal with things in a high emotional intelligence is very important, schooling influence ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, well, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73860182371 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83679946334 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495440729483 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3158771001 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.933333333 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366930520192 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121509185125 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115506277872 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216043118756 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957743754912 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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