As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.)
By and large, the break times between university semesters has become the focus of increased attention among parents and university's officials. It is owning to the fact that these breaks are vital for students as they have a opportunity to learn new things. Also, students usually squaender these chances. A question can be raised in this regard that is what kind of activities benefit students more than others. Some universities propose taking a unrelated course while others require student to pick vollunteer jobs. I prefer the former idea and in the ensuing lines, I will delve into two reasons to substantiate my point.
The first reason is that a job experience provides better future career opportunity for students. As people study mostly theoritical materials in the universities, working on the break times let them to gain some practical experiences which are not studied at university. Thus, as having a few experiences is somehow required for new employees, this volunteer jobs help student to get jobs in the future more expeditiously. My own experience helps to understand this idea better. When I was a under graduate student, university forced us to have an internship during the summar. In the begining, it was really hard and unpleasant to work in the a real workplace because the environment was different from university and what I thought, but after a while, I gained a plethora of valuable experiences about jobs and how to deal with your co-workers which help me a lot in my future career in to ways. First, I put this internship on my resume that enhance my chance to find a job. Second, I was familiar with a workplace environment and political issues happend there.
Second, this vollenteer work improves the image of a university. As students work for free and ask to help local activities, in the long run, the society appreicate the help come from this program. For example, in the last year, my university wanted every student to work with the well-known charity by help them to increase the green spaces and parks in the city. The contribution of students are significant and considerable. So, at the end of summar the mayer of the city personally appreciated this work and gave the university the honored sign. As a result, the university's improved image attracted more students around the country.
In summary, all aforementioned reasons bring us to conclude that having a job during semesters is a suprior option as it benefits both students and university by finding future career easily and improving university's image, respectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in summary, kind of, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04918032787 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90557295655 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548009367681 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2608440226 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293402696448 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092242700892 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765322249087 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203829968074 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723272931046 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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