study what you like or what provide you with many jobs opportunities
The work has an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to have a commute on daily basis in order to provide the amenities of life for ourselves and our children, in addition, to secure future life. However, due to the unemployment crises that happens nowadays, dwellers have faced difficulties while they are seeking for a job. Therefore, I personally believe that the study that will endow me with many job opportunities is better than study what I like due to its benefits in both terms of establishing the communication skills and enhance my experience. The following explanations go as follows.
First, the social skills are deemed as a guiding light that can guide people to achieve their goals. Indeed, by having the ability to interact and communicate easily with their peers in the workplace, they can instill the concrete basis of their interpersonal skills which have a great impact on their personalities. For instance, people who used to work at many places, they will learn how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively. So, such a collaborative environment enhance their large social network immensely which has a positive effect on their future workflow and productivity. Moreover, handling these skills will help them to finish their tasks in a most orderly and timely fashion. In contrast, those who study what they like, they may suffer a lot because they will not have the chance to work and improve their social skills and that will reflect negatively on their personalities. Consequently, it is critical to establishing a strong bond for our large social network by choosing the way that can provide us with myriad job opportunities.
Second, it is vital to refining the interdisciplinary development and experience as soon as we have done with our study and graduation. In fact, workers that perform diverse tasks will be able to gain rich experience and that will improve their intellectual ability. For example, when students have the capacity to change their tasks and jobs in the future, this will assist them to enrich their mind with new information that they can apply in other realm and fulfill their success. On the other hand, those who study what they only interest in, they will have a limited amount of knowledge because this will just provide them with academic study without practical experience. In conclusion, in order to have optimal experience people should carve out the knowledge from work.
To sum up, I can not oversee that studying what we like is also important, but, we can do that after taking the courses that will help us to have a lucrative salary in the future. Hopefully, students will grasp and harvest the knowledge from classes that will afford a verity of job's opportunity in the upcoming days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n fact, it is vitally important to have a commute on daily basis in order to provide the ...
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Line 3, column 941, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'establish'?
Suggestion: establish
...lities. Consequently, it is critical to establishing a strong bond for our large social netw...
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Line 4, column 25, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'refine'?
Suggestion: refine
...opportunities. Second, it is vital to refining the interdisciplinary development and e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02355460385 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82577531332 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511777301927 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6124266216 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.473684211 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5789473684 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9473684211 5.45110844103 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180454632344 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566070316719 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072375369771 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134821030032 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428520220984 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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