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t young students should choose a major that they feel happy about it

In the contemporary era, it is critically vital for the youngesters to choose their future path wisely. I am of the opinion that the have to follow their heart and choose a major that they find most intersiting. I have two convincing reasons to support my notion which I explain on the following paragraphs.
To begin with, most adult professionals who work seriously on their interests and talents are outstanding leaders on their field, consequently they are famous in the market which leads to a higher income. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I chose art as my major in collage while my whole family where sceptical about my future and my financial indenpendence. I worked to dead around the clock to nuorish my skills and become a professional artist. Finally after years of blood, sweat and tears my hard work paid off and I won the most prominent atristic prize in my country. This achivement not only helped me to prove myself to my family but also brought me fame which is the root of my current success and high income.
Secondly, in the hectic life of the industrial age with long working hours, we spend most of our life working. If we work on an unpleasend and unlovable subject for the most of the day, we will feel emotionally and phisycally exhausted and the end of the day. Disatisfaction with our job will have a negetive effect on our mental health, that can also lead to physical issues like high blood pressure and cardiovascular diceases. My fathers experience is a illustration of this subject. He was born as an artist, having no doubt that he will become a famous painter. while, he chose to become a car mechanic in orther to support his family at the age of fiftheen. Eventhough he tried his best to become professional and skillful in his job,I can see from his eyes that he doesn't feel satisfied with his work and most of his physical issues stems from it. If he had the chance to enter th collage to study art, he would had not be so deppressed and ill now.
In conclusion, I beleive that young students should choose a major that they feel happy about it and dose not consider its' salary. This is because the enthusiasim will help them to be outstading on the market which ingnites success and higher income and additionally, by doing so, they will have a better life quality, mentally and physically.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n the contemporary era, it is critically vital for the youngesters to choose thei...
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...ing leaders on their field, consequently they are famous in the market which lead...
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...kills and become a professional artist. Finally after years of blood, sweat and tears m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, no doubt, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62619047619 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69840277776 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538095238095 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9102521472 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.263157895 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161991691335 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568392040977 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147119513651 0.0737576698707 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140613191723 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145398997542 0.0645574589148 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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