technology and art and science
Children have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to start educating them from an early age and make them familiar with a vast array of subjects from different field such as science and art, in addition, parent should surge them to be up to date with the new technological development because, nowadays, being involved with the new innovations will simplify their tasks. However, kids should not squander most of their time using the advanced technology because this will lead to a hazardous effect on their welfare. Therefore, I personally believe that students should be exposed to a structured learning environment that contains studying about different topics by implementing technological devices such due to its benefits in both terms of improving the educational level and enhanced the social skills. The following explanations go as follow.
To begin with, the leap of technologies that provides us with a privilege of telecommunication, are able to assist the students to acquire the knowledge in an easy and affordable way. Indeed, they can save their time by utilizing their smart devices to search for all the information they need to improve their intellectual abilities and enrich their mind. For instance, My art teachers at the middle school, asked me to conduct a research in only one week, thus, I took the challenge and finished that in only five days by browsing the internet which offered a myriad of free e-books and free articles that aided me to fulfill my goal in a short period. So, this endowed me with a positive impression from my teacher and he called me the star of the class. Consequently, students should eagerly seek to harvest a knowledge by utilizing the new technological devices and innovations.
Second, studying art and science will help to improve the social skills which are the guiding light that helps the people to achieve their dreams. In fact, these two fields depend on a teamwork, thus, they have to deal effectively with each other in order to reach their goals. For example, when I was fifteen years old, I did a scientific experiment together with my peers, moreover, we performed a show in the school theater at the same time, it was really hard time for us because we struggled with many obstacles during our tasks, however, by working together we acted as a check and balance team, to prevent facing any mistakes in the future, furthermore, we had been taught how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively, thus, such a collaborative environment enhanced our interpersonal skills immensely. In conclusion, students should be surged to study science and art due to their significance in establishing the strong basis of the social skills.
To sum up, children are the cornerstone of the community that will guide our nation toward progress. Thus, I wholehearted believe that they have to be familiar with everything that will lead to their success such as the technology and the art alongside science.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n toward progress. Thus, I wholehearted believe that they have to be familiar with ever...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2525.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06012024048 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90578536371 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545090180361 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.912824799 48.9658058833 251% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.8125 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1875 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 5.45110844103 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193053889108 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641636544165 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687647929857 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12294143785 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297770325029 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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