technology has made children less creative.
Our times are changing, nowadays, we are submitted by the stimulus that are influenced our lives. As we know, technology has many advantages, but some disadvantages as well. Although some people may say that technology has made children less open mind, It is clear to me that technology has made children more creative and open to receive better information. I have two reasons to support my argument.
First of all, I believe that today children have more access to information that we have before. Therefore, they can get accurate and faster information that allows them doing better assignments or tasks. For example, my nephew lives in a rural area, and he has access to the internet that I had not before. So, he was to make up a story about creatures who live in caves, but he has never seen a cave, so he looked at on internet some caves’ pictures, and he stated with his story.
Second, Technology has made many tools to allow children to make their life easier. Thereby, children have some devices that can use to enhance their creativity. For instance, Apple has invented many innovative devices like tablets and smartphones. In fact, children are using it because it is more attractive to them. Therefore, they can use it to paint and drawing on its screen. It is a better way to encourage these children to get art skills.
Finally, I believe that technology has a lot to give us yet, and it is just the beginning. From my point of view, it is important to guide children in the right way and using these devices with conscious. Children have the ability to learn fast, and if we learn them using well that technology, it probably can get children with better art skills than they were before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...by, children have some devices that can use to enhance their creativity. For instan...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...ous. Children have the ability to learn fast, and if we learn them using well that t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61867369187 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.383659865 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4705882353 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7058823529 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257478261822 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784603956817 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106918018019 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167032813479 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104254596118 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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