technology has made children less creative than they were in the past
It is undeniable that childhood is a period of life that it is full of creativity. However, there are many things that could affect this period of life, and make it less creative. In my view, Technology is one of those things. I feel this way about it because children in the past were responsible about finding their ways to have fun. In addition to that, it offers opportunities and choices for kids that prevent them from thinking creatively.
To begin with, before Technology, kids had to figure out what they might do during the day to fulfill their time after the school or how they could play and have fun. This thing made them have a new idea every day which is different than the one from the day before, so it made them more creative. For example, when my sibling and I were young, we had a three months vacation to do what ever we want because this vacation was for us not for our parents. On 1999, we were bored, and we were out of ideas, but my older brother was playing with a napkin when he suggested to build a castle from a million of them. It was a stupid idea which we were sure that it will make our mother very angry, but we did it. We spent almost three weeks building that castle and another three weeks to clean it, but we had a lot of fun, and it was the best vacation for us.
Second, these days, technology offers many choices for kids which prevent their minds from thinking about different routes to spend their time. For instance, when I asked my four years old nephew about what he wants to do after school, he did not bother himself to think, his answer was '' I will check what is new on my I-pad'' his answer was a shock for me because I remember when I was at his age, I did not know any thing about a computer or even a mobile phone.
To sum up, I believe that technology decreases children creativity not only because it offers many chances, but also children are not concern anymore about what they have to do. That is why I strongly suggest that parents have to put restriction for the usage of technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, as for, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.28165374677 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23062230648 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0360632361 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.466666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169582600492 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553466272503 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587896453107 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104763106775 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056456255713 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 58.1214874552 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.84 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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