technology have made childre less creative that they were in the past.
The issue of whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the pass is very controversial. On one side supporters of the idea that new generation are less creative because the influence of technology mention that before that technology arrive to our world, kids were able use their minds to create different things. On the other hand, critics of this maintain the beliefs that our new generation are quite creative and versatile. However, after a very careful consideration, I maintain that indeed, technology has been a bad influence in children.
First, in past generations kids did not have the possibility to use cell phones, computers, internet, or wiffi. They enjoyed when their parents or grandparents told stories about wild animals or a whale that lived in a deep ocean. Their imagination was above and beyond because the stories seemed reals. As a result, children were able to have a creative imagination. When they had to make a homework, they made it easier. I remember when my brother Oscar started his kindergarten, his teacher assigned to him a really difficult work. He had to create a monster made of paper for his art class. Since my brother always listened the stories that my grandpa told him, he was able to create the monster without problems. As we can see my brother used his imagination and creativity, rather than use technology that did not exist at that time.
Second, I believe that technology decreases kids level of creativity because they do not use their minds to produce something. Instead kids search everything they need in the internet. As a result, the creativeness never going to flow. I remember when I was studying art and music in the academy of San Alejandro in Havana, every time that I had to paint I researched the ideas in the internet. As a consequence, my painting was not as good as my friend’s painting. He always was original and genuine.
In conclusion, for all that I mentioned before, I can affirm that technology has made children less creatives. the reason of that is because they want to use it for everything they going to do instead of thinking by their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, so, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85365853659 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81959012946 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49864498645 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.38869313 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2631578947 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317172947901 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955854190505 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101132801256 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19168953232 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671648208758 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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