Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The meaning of extended family has decreased within the years. A few years ago, many family used to live together sharing the same home, but nowadays it does not exist anymore. In the following essay, I will explain with two reasons why I believe so.
First of all, before all member not direct of a family shared a same house for a long period. In one home used to live parents, grandparents, aunts, cousins and so on. Within the past of the years different countries have passed difficult economic situations that have decreased the possibilities for many families to continue living together. As a result, families have taken the decision of split them to enhance the quality of live. My personal experience is an example of that. About ten years ago when we live in Cuba, all my family leave together, my grandparents, my cousins, my parents, my aunts and my uncles. Since we emigrated to United States we had to separate and everyone rented their own house because the situation in this country is different to which we were used to. As you can see my extended family will not exist anymore.
Moreover, extended family also have been affected because many people want independence once they get married. Young people do not want to live with member of their families because they do not want to be controlled by others. Living with their parents, aunts, or grandparents will not let them make act with freedom. For example, my brother is thirty years old. Since he got married he rent his own apartment and he is living with his wife alone. This is another example that show us how extended family has been destroyed and it is now less important than before.
In conclusion, for all that I mention above, I strongly believe that extended family is less important now than it was in the past. Many circumstances have decrease the value of extended family, such as economic situations and independence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77341389728 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56645058667 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537764350453 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9842994387 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1578947368 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224387902236 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736174967902 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715956345002 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15031725186 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468808508713 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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