Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of opinion on the ubiquity of advertisements, particularly the ones from television screens. In my opinion, commercials should be restricted by age groups and the ones target the younger kids of age between 2 to 5 should be banned. I will explore my two reasons in this essay.
To begin with, child development mainly happens in the early age stages. Therefore, it is extremely important to surround these young kids by educated factors. As these young children are just started to see and recognize colors and noises, what kind of content these babies consume will affect their personality development. For this very reason, it is not beneficial for the young kids to consume advertisements. For instance, when my brother was 4 years old, my parents were not watching the TV when he was awake and in the same room with us. When I asked my mother, what is the reason, she told me that it is not okay for him to be exposed by all those colors and constant movements at this very early stage of his life. After then I’ve learnt during my social psychology class that my mother was right. Therefore, small kids should not watch television particularly the advertisements.
Additionally, since the main aim of the advertisement industry is selling a specific product and finding new consumers and that mentioned age group is neither can purchase anything nor demand from their parents it is a waste of money for the industry to create and commercial. Even though products used by babies such as baby diapers should not targeting to attract babies due to the fact that those products are necessities. Instead, they could aim to reach parents by including slogans and visuals that speak to mothers and fathers. For example, in my home country the television surveillance community has introduced new age regulations to watch particular programs, this new development also includes advertisements by limiting audience age groups.
To conclude, commercial that are specifically directed young children in the ages between 2 and 5 should be banned. This is because watching commercials is not good for child development and these advertisements are generally waste of money since those babies have not developed the ability to purchase or demand anything that they see on the screens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 725, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s at this very early stage of his life. After then I’ve learnt during my social psych...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'target'
Suggestion: target
... babies such as baby diapers should not targeting to attract babies due to the fact that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03141361257 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9051128945 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531413612565 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.080920857 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.058823529 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20292503875 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713407824086 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767198437521 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139276056564 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397346954792 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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