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Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

In this world of media and technology, one can hardly find someone who has not seen a TV ad. Be it a small household item or the fanciest car on the market, it can't go without featuring in an advertisement. Same with us humans. From the toddlers to the old, everyone is fascinated by these ads and many would also like to be a part of one. But I believe that there should be some restrictions on these ads especially with respect to the audience they are meant for. Children especially should not be exposed to them, be it watching an ad or acting in it.

Firstly, watching the television for long hours is bad for these children. They are too small to even understand most of what is being shown to them. In such scenarios, a fancy ad may tempt them to watch even more TV. The more they indulge in watching these ads, the less time they spend doing other activities. Many children often loose track of what they were doing when their favorite ad is being aired. The biggest example of this is children forgetting to eat while watching TV. Children are also very naive to understand the difference between reality and fiction. A lot of times, children ask their parents to get them a very fictional thing they saw. I remember my little cousin once asked her parents for a unicorn and they had a really hard time convincing her that it was not real. Such stubborness if instilled in such a tender age may hamper the child's personality.

Moreover, to draw attention of toddlers, ad directors cast babies of the same age in the ads. This trick works amazingly well, as they are quite delighted to see someone just like them on TV. While this may gain many views for the ad, it is not beneficial for the children who act in it. AD/ film sets are no place for such small children, they could easily hurt themselves. Also they sometimes have to stay away from their parents for very long hours, hence depriving them of their love and attention.

So no matter how amazing a child looks in an ad or how much she/he enjoys it, I do not think it is a good idea, to expose children to the world of television advertisements.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...m or the fanciest car on the market, it cant go without featuring in an advertisemen...
^^^^
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...m or the fanciest car on the market, it cant go without featuring in an advertisemen...
^^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ren, they could easily hurt themselves. Also they sometimes have to stay away from t...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, well, while, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44358974359 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47993791146 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.668128126 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7727272727 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128440207606 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432397426665 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426880861928 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823344764252 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312321313095 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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