Television advertising directed toward young children ( aged two to five ) should not be allowed.
Children are the most ingenuous creature of human being. They are like raw soil and their parents are more responsible to shape them like a proper beautiful vase of a flower. Todlers have so innocent mind that they cant distinguish what is wrong and what is right. so, I agree with the statement that Television advertising directed toward little one should be forbidden.
To begin with, Television has so,many channels that shows advertisement of anything without any restriction. If the young one saw that kind of irrelevant adds then it will be hard for their parents to answer each and every questions. For example, the advertisement of different kinds of junk food which exaggerate about many things like after eating xyz biscuit they will get superpower like batman, spiderman.so, after seeing that add they can demand of that junk food which is very deleterious to their health. Such kind of advertisement shouldn't be shown to children. Rather they should be taught to eat healthy foods and fruits.
Secondly, We can see abound of advertisement about toys which are very expensive. If by chance they see such kind of adds then they will cry and demand for such toy which their parents cant afford. Parents should avoid children from those adds and they shouldn't open television in front of their child. They should teach their children about creative things and should suggest to read books and learn good manners. This kind of good gesture can avoid children from unnecessary demand of stuff.
So, Home is their first school and parents is their teacher. Their manner and behavior to children will determine how the child will become. Thats why it is parents duty to banned such tv adds to open at house.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96563573883 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51023812615 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549828178694 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8716692221 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1176470588 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185608009519 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745602150332 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823975479551 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116105367344 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562814678789 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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