Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
The visual media in this world is the strongest force of addiction. I agree with the statement that advertising through television directed towards young children should not be allowed. I feel this way for a few reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Television was introduced in the late 1950s which was a contemporary discovery for the world. It is a well-known fact that television violence on children is raising and it persuaded in their leisure time. The electronic media is responsible for the attitudes and values of children especially of ages between two to five. This age limit is the momentous time in a person's life as the neurological development is approaching its end by the time of 6 years. The advertisements over the television had a huge impact on this time as there are chances of trusting the adds rather than their parent's advice. I can illustrate an example from my son's life. He is 4 years now and he used to watch TV a lot. Once he watched an advertisement for a toy car and he compelled us to buy it. He argues that his friends also had the same toy car and if we refuse to buy it, he may humiliate us in front of others. After a few days of his rebellious behavior, we are obligated to buy it. This example clearly illustrates how much influence television had on a child's life. Therefore as a parent, we must control our children from the perilous hands of visual media.
Secondly, the current obsession with television has caused several other detrimental effects on the family. The family storytellers had been replaced by televisions. The TV shows, broadcasts, music programs..etc carved our precious time to spent with the family. My mother used to tell us stories of fiction and events that took place earlier and we were eagerly awaited for her stories. This made our bond deep and we laughed and sleep together in the same bed. But now, my child never listens to me and he loves to watch television while he eats or sleeps. I can assure that my son is slipping from my hands if he addicts to the visual media. As a result, I planned to deviate his mind from TV to other media like learning and playing a musical instrument. Now, he spends his considerable time along with his guitar and he now had time to listen to my music and my stories.
Finally, we should endorse our children to do outside and indoor activities to deviate from TV. If they are still addicted to them, we should seek counseling for our children without any due. We should encourage them to do households like cooking, laundry, gardening, and others so that they can seek enjoyment from that rather than electronic media.
In sum, visual media is destroying our young generation through its deep roots in children's minds. However, by selectively deviating their minds to other forms can extract our children from the depicted faults of television.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70891089109 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72588912511 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520792079208 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7578208199 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4137931034 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.79310344828 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185856992054 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509553636058 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916862984322 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119270326897 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814347324017 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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