TPO20 -Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Knowledge can provide great success for any person in the world. To receive victory, however, needs constant hard work and perseverance. A clear determination to achieve the goal is precisely needed so that they can encode any obstacles in their path to achieving the dream. Those who won tend to try new things and take risky decisions. I think this way for 3 reasons, which I can explain the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, it is a possible thought that, people who took risks tend to be successful in their journey. They may think out of the path that everyone usually thinks. Moreover, a risky decision can compromise various factors in their life, but the dedication to improve can make them successful. My brother's life is a compelling example of this. He is a mechanical engineer. While his college life, he managed to study Masters of Business Education (MBA) along with his engineering course. It was a highly risky decision and each of his friends along with his parents opposed his plan. They argued to concentrate one at a time, but he refused their opinions and he struggled tenaciously during his studies. Ultimately, he completed both courses almost at the same time. His struggles are worthwhile because he got interviews with many legendary companies due to his double-qualifications. Now he is the CEO of a reputed firm. This example clearly illustrates the direct relationship between success and risky decisions.
Second, winning in life needs not only the courage to take risky decisions but trying new fields also. Everyone knows about the great inventor, Thomas Alva Edison. His discoveries in various fields lead to unprecedented growth of civilization from the nineteenth century. He constantly tried new fields in his ventures. For instance, the discovery of bulb was a revolutionized victory in his lifetime, that provides a daily need for every individual in the world. Furthermore, his marvel- the Vitascope and the introduction of moving pictures drastically changed the mentalities of the film world. He did both of the above-mentioned discoveries in very different fields. Edison's diverse patented discoveries made him a successful person. This example precisely shows how trying new things can make a person successful than introverting to do what they know to do well.
Finally, hard work and prayer can make a person to victory. I need to pass my national board exam to be a dentist in the USA. I studied along with my fulltime job, and my prayers supported me as well. Thus, I cleared my exam and now I'm a great dentist.
In sum, a complex variety of factors leads a person to success. Primary factors like taking risks and the ability to try new fields can persuasively pave the path for victory. Albeit some people never tend to do new things or risky decisions, they can never be as successful as like the contrary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e risky decisions but trying new fields also. Everyone knows about the great invento...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...s well. Thus, I cleared my exam and now Im a great dentist. In sum, a complex v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99373695198 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94282551604 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538622129436 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7710762421 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4848484848 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5151515152 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06060606061 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186573023723 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446537809775 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079155864665 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10841833846 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696587634734 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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