Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Nowadays, advertising programs occupy a key part in television. Therefore, there is widely held among people that these programs should not be concerning children. However, I personally subscribe to the view that allocating these programs about children especially main demands of children can have more advantage for families and society mainly because these programs have a much profit for government and give a right for children to choose independently. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the most important reason, I believe that the advertising programs have many advantages on society such as financial profit. To be more specific, these programs have streamlined the process of finding, buying and selling products. According to a recent article on Forbes.com, a website that reports on finance and marketing topics, today the advertising programs have significant effects on people and obtained pure profit from the selling of goods according to these programs is about 1B$ in U.S.A and this money can is invested about children. For instance, according to a new law in our country, 30 percent of pure profit from advertising programs should are spent about the convenience of children in different parts such as educational issues, etc. For this reason, I strongly believe that advertising programs can be useful for children.
There is a further more subtle word we must consider, which is the fact that giving a choice right for children have a pleasant effect on the character of children. In fact, when infants are able to make a primary decision, they absolutely will have a better future because most of these children have more self-confidence. My own experience is also a compelling example of this. When I was a child, I had complete liberty in choosing clothes and I feel that ability has a positive effect on me. Accordingly, I think, giving reasonable freedom for children to choose autonomously is intellectual.
In a word, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into account we may draw the conclusion that the advertising programs can be valuable for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26744186047 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00556091778 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526162790698 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8270895688 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142687384654 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598470535402 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452308689272 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103277912749 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241314373915 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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