Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Nowadays, having a suitable job and ability to maintain it plays a substantial role in our lives. Therefore, there is no shortage of debate about whether it is better to spend much time on favorite works or doing very important thing such as duty. I personally subscribe to the view that people today spend a considerable part of their times for paramount works because mainly people for having a convenient life, must work hard and the competition between people in different facets necessitate them to work hardly. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the most important reason why I believe that today for having a calm life and being in the amenity, we should have a well-suited career. In fact, the companies are looking for a diligent employee who has adequate experience. In addition, nowadays money has a substantial role in our lives. For this reason, absolutely, people will see disruptive effects on their lives if they do not notice sufficiently to their duties. A research carried out recently has revealed that the main explanation of the rise in the divorce rate is economic status. My own experience is a compelling example of this, when I have wanted to marry, the main request of my wife’s family was that I will be independent. For this reason, I strongly believe that people today should notice their jobs.
There is a further more subtle reason we must consider, which is the fact that the competition between companies, countries etc acclaim people to work harder. Because after the Industrial Revolution, economic has a considerable impact on the autonomy of countries. As we know, the third world countries have huge reservoirs of oil, gas, expensive metals etc, but the growth of these countries in many aspects such as industrial, economic are very slow because the policy of these countries depends on those reservoirs. For instance, the Europe countries have not any significant natural wealth but because of the valid policy of their governments, with creating the abundant job’s opportunity, these countries known as prosperous and advanced countries.
In a word, by taking all the aforementioned reasons into account we may draw the conclusion that people are had to spend major time on their important works. This is primarily due to the facts that for being in convenience, people should have an appropriate job and also the society’s conditions cause that people find the best job.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, therefore, third, well, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10024449878 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88067708438 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555012224939 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.822343675 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.705882353 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133436204781 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403439210258 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606731021238 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833909263226 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541337416712 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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