Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the virtual world occupies a significant time of our lives. Whether these application and facilities are seen as useful tools for children or not depends on the lens through which one is looking. Although, I personally subscribe to this view that these facilities help children to think better, and have positive effects on their personalities mainly because the social media have increased the level of awareness and creativity among children. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is presented below.
First and possibly the important reason why I believe that social media can have positive effects on children is that they can learn very useful information about their society. In fact, children are not able to perceive whether what is right or what is wrong, so parents and society have a significant role in their progress. Unfortunately, most parents think traditionally and ignore unintentionally the major demands of their children, so parents fulfill their responsibilities partially. Furthermore, in today's word, societies are competing with each other and are not able to provide an appropriate for children to be aware of the primitive subjects. As a result, social media can help children to get familiar with their world. I believe that these superficial familiarities ready children to expand their vision and have significant impacts on their personalities.
There is a further subtle word we must consider, which is the fact that video games have provided a very suitable environment for children to be able to simulate the actual world in their homes. They can discover their talents by these games because most children can not provide a good situation for themselves independently, so video games help children to be able to learn easily and increase their self-confidence when they are facing with challenging problems. My own experience is also a compelling example of this. When I was young, I had interested in playing football by Play Station console, so that interest encouraged me to discover my talent in football. Accordingly, I can relate my positive sense about these games because these games change the way of my life.
In a word, by taking all of the aforementioned reasons into account we may draw the conclusion that technology has increased the level of awareness of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this application' or 'these applications'?
Suggestion: this application; these applications
... significant time of our lives. Whether these application and facilities are seen as useful tools...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...way of my life. In a word, by taking all of the aforementioned reasons into account we ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26329787234 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03037358172 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515957446809 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7536900437 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6875 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12624558049 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046210669704 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241104577902 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773438688216 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202315417714 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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