TOEFL IND writing 185-91 If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
It is critically vital that people shall stand on the giant’s shoulders, and learn from their merits and faults so that we would not let history replay again. In my opinion, if I am going to ask a famous person a question, I would like to ask them how they overcome those hardships. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is noticeable that it is impossible for people to avoid plights in their entire lifetime, and it is wiser for us to learn from those celebrities due to the fact that they have already been through those routes. It is not incorrect for citizens to fight on their own and overcome those difficulties alone, however, the time and efforts that they devote to it are unworthy. For instance, Just as the greatest classic physician Issac Newton said, I am standing on the giant's shoulders.
In addition, there is no doubt that a successful person does not succeed owing to luck; all celebrities have their unique method to succeed, and several of them might be suitable for us to exploit. It is obvious that nothing in this world turned out for no reason, yet it was the inevitable result of careful preparation. By the way of illustration, personages do not appear in this world by chance, by contrast, it is the period and planning that creates the hero.
Last on the contrary not least, there is no denying that a superb person is not able to shine out without life with challenges and setbacks. It is clear that carbon will never become a diamond without extreme heat and pressure, and the rocky coast will never become unique without the weathering and carving by the wave of the vigorous ocean. To cite an instance, therefore, behind the dazzling beauty, there is very loneliness. But after every effort of peace and tranquility, mirrors the leap of life's trajectory.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is a precious opportunity for people to receive suggestions of the method of overcome plights from those famous people since every victory has its arduous trace that most normal residents do not notice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...devote to it are unworthy. For instance, Just as the greatest classic physician I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, by the way, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74871794872 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56019702562 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8243618414 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210016537333 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819005080448 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168373520741 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171453758588 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.300896678764 0.0645574589148 466% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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