TOEFL IND writing 185-98 If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
It is critically vital that there is always an object that can represent the county. In my opinion, I believe that if there is an opportunity for my country to attend the international exhibition, I will suggest that tea is the most suitable item to represent the region I live in. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is noticeable that my country is located in the most favorable area for tea to survive, which is more liable for farmers to cultivate high-quality tea leaves. Tea cannot be harvested in regions that will reach Frozen points or places that are too arid, which means that the location of the plant is extremely essential. For instance, my country contains several hills which are suitable for tea leaves to grow, and the weather there is humid enough to provide the most comfortable environment for the plant.
In addition, there is no denying that there is a long history of the origin of the tea that traced back from my country. It is said that the emperor of the region discovered tea as a warm breeze that blew several leaves in the pot that he was boiling water and provided a special scent and transformed the water into brown color. By the way of illustration, the history of tea in my country shows that it is reasonable for us to represent tea in the exhibition.
Last on the contrary not least, there is no denying that tea connects the family and expands the connection to the whole community. The connection between people of the region is extremely critical since the only method to make the country stronger is to connect the people who lived in it. To cite an instance, family members or neighbors might visit people and drink tea while chatting, which highlighted the importance of tea in my country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that tea plays a vital role in my country since it contains a historical origin in the region where I lived and the connection it presents to strengthen the community so that it is the most iconic element to represent my country in the international exhibition.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, by the way, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68194070081 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68174700299 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458221024259 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4174093271 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.615384615 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0600833644302 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276904872924 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303746051197 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437510218349 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253948269378 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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