If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Every nation, all around the world, has its own specific history and culture created through thousands of hardships and wounds which have already been overpassed. Thus, that is not possible to represent a whole country by only one thing. Anyway, if there was an international exhibition for countries, I would send the Persian carpet as a representative of Iran for several reasons that I explore through the following paragraphs.
First of all, I believe that the Persian carpet is the best symbol of Iran in an international exhibition because it is a board full of Persian arts. There has always been this argument that Persians were the most brilliant artists of ancient eras. Different types of beautiful art works including Persian carpet from ancient Persia would show why there has been such a debate. Knots of Persian carpet were created ages ago and have become more strong and elegant during the time. Besides, combining apparently-different but consciencely-compatible colors in a large board, stunning design of the whole art work, delicately-elaborated details in every inch of the carpet and many other great features altogether bring an unearthly enchanted art to the party.
Secondly, Persian carpet as a representative of Iran in an international exhibition is in a close interaction with Persian’s culture and historical life. Making carpets by hand is still common in different parts of the country. As every section of Iran has its own culture, rituals, history and even language, carpets created in each part is a mirror of thoughts of people whom it belongs to. The carpet, like a painting, could show some religious beliefs, cultural rituals like wedding parties, hunting and other ways of illustrating the power, a scene of war between kingdoms or simply just a combination of geometries come to the mind of a housewife. Thus, every manually-created carpet from each part of the country has its own story and could represent the culture of that part.
On the whole, it is not that easy to find a single object which could represent the whole country especially age-old ones like Iran. But, due to the wonderful art in addition to the cultural and historical representation of the Persian carpet, I suppose that it is the best symbol of Iran in an international exhibition.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, apparently, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, i suppose, in addition, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10582010582 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16616161607 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526455026455 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.531054416 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.666666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129862973298 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517537991335 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458531735078 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958023676154 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472713223396 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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