If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice

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If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Most of the time, the object is not what matters the most, it is the story behind it. That is why I will send a yellow vest to represent my country, France, to an international exhibition. To the French population, yellow vests are not anymore just a security vest that you put into your car in case of an accident, it is a symbol. I believe that this object is the reflection of the actual political events in France and symbolise a revolutionary tendency.
For a couple of months, every Saturdays, a part of the French population reunited themselves into the streets to show their angriness to French’s president. These people are wearing yellow vest because they were fighting for decreasing oil’s price, at first. Then, it became bigger, these people were the speakers of the worker class. They want to deliver the message at the president that people are tired and mad to work hard while the French president delete taxation for rich people. I believe they want, and they fight for social justice, so it will be a pleasure that other people from around the world see this battle.
Moreover, to me, the yellow vest is a physical form of an history between French workers and the power. For example, in 1789, the storming of the Bastille happened, marking the beginning of the French revolution. Workers did not want anymore a royalty on top of them. Nowadays, the population is taking the street. It is a symbol of a new kind of revolution.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
..., the yellow vest is a physical form of an history between French workers and the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, so, still, then, while, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1204.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 255.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72156862745 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65518288548 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560784313725 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 618.680645161 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1467717717 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0953376023087 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315980772308 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571430407768 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695176504618 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761427820867 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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