Too much education is dangerous. If people receive more education than they need to function in their job, it only breeds dissatisfaction. To what extend do you agree with this?
In the present-day world in which we live, new technologies and sciences have been developed at an astounding rate. Any individual should keep pace with such developments in order to succeed in his or her profession. However, how much education a person should receive is a heated controversy. As far as I am concerned, the amount of education everyone needs to receive should be commensurate to their job needs, and more education than such amount leads to dissatisfaction.
Everything a person learns has to be applied in a way in order to be reviewed; otherwise, it can be forgotten. There is no exception for education. If people receive more education than they need to function in their jobs, much of it will not be used, and as time passes, their knowledge and skills they have acquired will be forgotten and lost. People invest a large amount of their precious time to obtain such education and knowledge. Therefore, by forgetting them, they feel dissatisfaction because they think they have squandered their invaluable time that they could have spent on other beneficial activities such as staying with their family as well as earning money.
The more advanced education people get, the more complicated knowledge they need to learn. Learning complex knowledge which people never need to fulfill their duties and responsibilities in jobs has two implicit consequences. The first one is that learning advanced sciences requires people to spend enormous time and attention on them. On the other hand, receiving enough education to do jobs properly leads people not only to spend less time and attention, but also to enter the labor market earlier. The second one is that people learning advanced knowledge often think fastidiously, and they erroneously think that more complex knowledge is required to address the practical world problems and their job requirements. Therefore, they almost always reluctantly engage in practical work and problems, resulting in less experience they gain. Eventually, these two implicit consequences give rise to an explicit one which is people receiving too much education commonly fall behind their peers in a number of aspects, conspicuous of which is financial.
To sum up, I strongly subscribe to the idea that people receiving more education than they need to efficiently fulfill their jobs are dissatisfied on the ground that they forget much of them, and they lag behind their peers, specifically financially. In addition, I wish human beings would adhere to a proverb that says, “Enough is good enough.” so as to have a relaxed and peaceful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to complex'
Suggestion: to complex
... knowledge they need to learn. Learning complex knowledge which people never need to fu...
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Line 7, column 347, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...erb that says, “Enough is good enough.” so as to have a relaxed and peaceful life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, such as, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19952494062 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93571708217 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.558190959 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.611111111 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389650989813 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122073002179 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101223365694 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241576808774 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248665001094 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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