This topic has been offered at least 2 times in the past 10 months: Some people believe
that spending time away from people we care about helps us improve our relationship with them,
because being away from these people makes us realize how important they are to us. Other people
believe that to improve our relationships with the people we care about, we should spend as much
time with them as possible, because spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship. Which
view do you agree with and why?
In today’s convoluted world friendship play a monumental role in people’s lives. It is not far-fetched to assume that some people share most of their personal facts with their friends. In this regard, there is a controversial debate among individual among people about the relation between the time that people spend with each other and the intimacy of their relationship. Some people may hold the view that the most people spend time away from their friends, the most their relationship will improve, while, some others take the opposing viewpoint. I firmly believe that reducing the amount of time people spend with each other can damage people’s relationships. In the following, I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two pieces of evidence.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that regular meetings can optimize a relationship. It is generally agreed that when people meet up with each other, they would have more opportunity to recognize each other’s personality traits and characteristics. Knowing more about our friends’ hallmarks can pave the way for enhancing our relationships. Take a personal experience as an example; when I studied at Tehran University, I required living in dorm rooms due to the fact that I studied far away. In this circumstance, I lived more than three years with one of my roommates named Roozbahan in the same room. Spending lots of time with each other enabled us to discuss our hobbies and favorite activities. Moreover, we watched most of the recent movies with each other and spoke about the strengths and weaknesses of them. As a result, at the final days of the university, we had a meticulous knowledge of our likes and dislikes which caused quality time for us. Had I not spent an extreme amount of time with Roozbahan, I would not have been able to find an intimate friend like him in my life.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that spending much time with our friends opens doors for optimizing their closeness. No one can neglect the fact that when people spend time with each other, they would have more chance to deal with their friends’ problems. Needless to say being supportive is one of the main measures of a qualified friend as the quote says ‘a friend in need is a friend indeed.’ Consequently, coping with issues can give rise to improving a relationship. According to a recent study that was published in Time magazine, researchers investigated the relationship between more than 150 employees in 21 companies. The results revealed that coworkers who spend some time for manipulating a specified issue are well-coming to strengthen their relationships more than working hours. Interestingly, more than 87 percent of coworkers dealing with the same problem, having family relationships.
In brief, one can logically conclude that spending the most time with our friends can deepen our relationships more regarding its capability of recognizing his friends’ characters and an increasing sense of supportive among friends. However, there are other reasons and example, challenging these reasons, not mentioned above. All in all, it is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound consequences of this argument on friends’ morale.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, well, while, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2763.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24288425047 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03933645992 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514231499051 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 842.4 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6293373753 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.125 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9583333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289790165427 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879206425165 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644888158489 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18139107516 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758152390624 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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