TPO 05
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on our life. Most indivduals today do not have time to perform their activities. From my vantage point, I believe that the sophesticated life does not allow people to have enjoyed time for the following reasons.
To begin with, people have a lot of commitments. For instance, I am a student and working for a part time. I should study and work in order to pay my tuition fees, rent, bills, feul, Insurance for car and health. Also, I should prepare food and study when I come back to my home because I live alone. I imerse in life commitments. I do not have time to perform fun activities. On the other hand, before few decades, when my father was studying, he was came back to his home. He did not perform any work just studying. He had much time to have enjoyed time with thier mates after he finished his home work. life's responsibilities was few compared today.
Finally, having fan need a lot of money. Most entertainments today are too expensive. For instance, as i mentioned before I am studying. If i want to go to change mood and have enjoyed time, I should pay money. Last week, I went with my friend to American concert. I paid roughly 200 dollars for haveing fan. Not all students aor people could afford these prices. On the other hand, before people could spent their time with their family and went to the park. Most activities were free. They did not pay money to have fan.
To wrap it up, having fan in these days is less compared than before because
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on o...
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Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...tance, I am a student and working for a part time. I should study and work in order to pa...
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Line 4, column 453, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...es, when my father was studying, he was came back to his home. He did not perform an...
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Line 4, column 607, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lifes
... mates after he finished his home work. lifes responsibilities was few compared today...
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Line 9, column 104, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...day are too expensive. For instance, as i mentioned before I am studying. If i wa...
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Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...as i mentioned before I am studying. If i want to go to change mood and have enjo...
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Line 9, column 404, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
... On the other hand, before people could spent their time with their family and went t...
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Line 9, column 519, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'fanned'.
Suggestion: fanned
...re free. They did not pay money to have fan. To wrap it up, having fan in thes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, so, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1247.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51811594203 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47007664212 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0671874948 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.9583333333 100.406767564 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.5 20.6045352989 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.875 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 11.7677419355 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.75 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.53 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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