In this century, technological advancement facilitates communication between different nations far from distances. In this regard, people are more fascinated to travel to foreign countries, and it helps them to broaden their view, increase the information and expands their own experience. Some argue that traveling to a foreign country can instruct worthwhile lessons and can benefits the traveler too. While others hold the different idea that it is more beneficial if one's travel to own country. From my perspective, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, people gain experience and knowledge by traveling abroad. Every country follows its own culture and custom which is definitely different from the other country's culture. Moreover, people in the other country have different thought process and behavior. Hence, all these factors will be beneficial for travelers to develop themselves in a different manner. To illustrate this, when I went abroad for my further education, I had chosen to stay in a dormitory with other students. Initially, I could not able to understand their behavior and their nature since most of them were grown in a different way as I grew up in my country. But, at the same time, my roommate has easily adapted that environment since she has traveled more than 10 countries from her childhood, and that experience helped her to adopt the different environment easily compared to myself. Therefore, traveling abroad makes people think in a broader way, and also, they gain an enormous amount of experience in another country.
Furthermore, overseas traveling help student to gain more knowledge. With the development of science and technology, each country has adopted its own different technology. Students who are pursuing their Ph.D. can go to the other country and can learn about the different aspects of technological advancement. When they come back to their home country, the numerous industries and the research institute can use the novel technology from the students in order to expand their business. This would be beneficial for the developing country. With the growth of technology and the institutes, many job opportunities would be available, and the country would excel economically.
Having discussed this issue from this point of view, I would rather look at it from another viewpoint. There are some advantages to travel to own country too. A country like India, where people follow more than thirty-five culture and religions. If people start traveling their own country, they would learn a lot about the different culture and religions which have been following by own people from last more than a hundred years. Also, the history of Indian culture is the oldest history in the world. On top of that, traveling to own country will help to raise the country's because when people travel to their country, they will be indirectly helping to raise their country's tourism and country's own economic situation.
All in all, I strongly believe that the advantages of traveling to other country outweigh the advantages of traveling to own country. This is because it helps to gain more knowledge about the new advance of the other country, and it makes people think in a broader way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
...can instruct worthwhile lessons and can benefits the traveler too. While others hold the...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
...rent idea that it is more beneficial if ones travel to own country. From my perspect...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ial for travelers to develop themselves in a different manner. To illustrate this, when I went abroad...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ir nature since most of them were grown in a different way as I grew up in my country. But, at the...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2769.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20488721805 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78103711238 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466165413534 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 852.3 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2549937972 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8928571429 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10714285714 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269608536094 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856587716407 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662564559483 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177382850366 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570727895993 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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