TPO 20
Work has a great influence on our well-being. It can affect our overall progress as it impacts our lives directly. Therefore, I agree with the statement that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know to do well. This is due to the fact that doing risky things can make us think outside the box, and create experiences.
To begin with, trying new things is one way of being successful because you can think outside the box. In fact, doing risky things can make you special as you try things most of your colleagues scare of. For instance, before Abbas Ibn Firnas, no one thought that people could fly and no one anticipated that people could create planes, but because he thought of the birds flying and wondered what if we could fly like them; he made his trial. Although he did not live to create any plane ar any invention, his trial was the spark for creating one of the safest way to travel these days. Even though some people believe that success comes as a result of doing what is ordinary, I think that taking the risk of doing what is extraordinary is the key for successful life.
Furthermore, people who take risk of doing new things are more likely to be successful because they can experience what might work and what may not. Indeed, successful people do many trials in order to discover that this new things can actually work better that the ordinary ways. For example, without the medical trials and experiments we can not discover any effective drug that can safe many lives around the world. Moreover, we have better healthcare system today because brave people took the risk to try new things, which led them to discover innovative technology and machines that improved our life. Thus, under no circumstances they would succeed without trying new things.
In conclusion, I genuinely agree that success come as a result of taking risk and trying new things because of the reasons I have mentioned before. Hopefully, more people are willing to take the risk in order to create better future for the next generations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 648, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Thus, under no circumstances they would succeed without trying new things. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73901098901 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39270889386 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508241758242 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9228089526 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8125 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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