TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All people wish to be successful and the key to prosperity is the most attractive matter for them. Personally, I believe that people who are thirsty to experience new ways and accept its consequences can achieve success. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who are eager to experience novel and ambiguous things and believe the result of them, are very self-confident. Also, they are more responsible for what they do. These two points are the most significant factors for success. However, a Non-experienced situation looks like a closed-door but it would never be opened if you don’t even try to knock the door. That’s what prosper people do. They believe in their capabilities and accept that winning in what they start today is fifty percent. My own experience is a compelling example of this.
About ten years ago, I started a new home business. I was very young and even I had not enough initial finance for that. But I tried very much day and night. In these ten years, I had wins and failures but I was never hopeless. Being in this way enhances my self-confidence and now I have developed my business and I am responsible for about forty personnel of mine.
Secondly, trying new things or new methods for previous matters can improve people’s mindset. All individuals live in their mental world. It means that the way someone thinks depends on the power of its mind. How far someone’s mind can fly, determine how high it can jump. Even if these successful ones lose the result of their risks, but they gain experience with that. Hence, they understand what they don’t have to do in the next same situation. So, they change a lost game to a win. For instance, when I was a student I tried many new ways to solve my education problems, the ways that were different from what the teacher had taught us. Although my classmates thought that I was wasting my time, I had pleasure with those new methods because this helped me to find my own methods and improve my knowledge.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that prosperity can be achieved by taking risks and gaining experiences. This is because it may lead to self-confidence and a more responsible man and of course this can help people to improve their mentality and thoughts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was never
...en years, I had wins and failures but I never was hopeless. Being in this way enhances my...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71674876847 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73929388367 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532019704433 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2019690666 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6538461538 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6153846154 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176529898013 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551859028122 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615992657173 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953583883512 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648846638147 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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