TPO 52 integrated essay
In the lecture, the professor discusses why colonizing asteroids would not be practical and what are the downsides of the reading points. On the other hand, the reading mentions that sending people to an asteroid would be the best colonization option for several reasons.
First, although low gravity makes it easy for spaceships to take off and land on an asteroid, it has major negative effects on people's bodies as it decreases their muscle mass and bone density. In fact, most of the astronauts suffer from these side effects even if they were there for a short period of time, two months, for example. Thus, people could not manage to live in a low gravity environment for a long time. The article, however, casts doubt on this point by saying asteroids have low gravity, which makes it easier for spacecraft to land and take off.
Second, the lecturer asserts that mining for precious metals may seem profitable; however, the costs of doing this are likely to be very high. Moreover, there is no guarantee that the price of selling these metals would be the same. It is most likely that the market price would decrease as the supply of these metals increases. This challenges the text, which points out that asteroids could be a great source of raw materials as many of them have valuable metals.
Finally, the professor claims that it might be easy to reach an asteroid but it could be challenging to return to the Earth. This is due to the fact that asteroids have unusual orbits, which in one point could be close to the Earth and in another point may be farther than Mars. This refutes the reading, which asserts that some asteroids get close to the Earth even closer than our moon.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...cts even if they were there for a short period of time, two months, for example. Thus, people ...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'returning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: returning
...an asteroid but it could be challenging to return to the Earth. This is due to the fact t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71140939597 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33428762115 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546979865772 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5441628143 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.0 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475404225794 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167189578991 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620425884951 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273537008179 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449118303934 0.0443174109184 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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