TPO 20 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People show different attitudes towards whether it is worth taking risks of trying new ideas. While some people prefer doing what they are adept at, in my opinion, I give my vote to the argument that one should try to discover new things to become successful. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, focusing time and energy on new ideas greatly contributes to people´s career development as they can enjoy competition-free business with the emergence of a new market sector. As a result, they earn a higher rate of return on their investment. For example, the founder of Uber became a billionaire in a short period of time with the introduction of the revolutionary car-sharing platform. It changed radically how people travel and use their cars. Car owners are now able to earn money from their vehicles while travelers save a huge amount of money on transportation. Another example is the director of the SpaceX company. He is the first to commercialize the reusable rockets for space missions saving millions of dollars for the US government. Without taking risks, Uber director and Mr. Elon Musk of SpaceX could not achieve such huge successes.
Secondly, engaging in different experiences and taking risks helps people to unveil their hidden potentials which are pivotal in their success. An individual will never know how good at a discipline he is until he actually performs it. A local singer in my country is a compelling sample. He used to perform pop songs for many years but did not gain any remarkable achievement and few people knew about him. However, two years ago, he tried a new style of rock music which is new in my country. This new style perfectly matches his voice and played an important role in bringing his name to our young people.
In conclusion, those above-mentioned reasons and examples add weight to my view that taking risks is a requisite approach to one´s advancement and being well-known.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...of Uber became a billionaire in a short period of time with the introduction of the revolution...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94362017804 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84836793707 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623145400593 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.274338125 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5555555556 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210267111295 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541101337204 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459355278249 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125164954944 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572954384477 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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