TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
try new things and take risks are the most critical concerns of successful people. Needless to say that every technology and new inventions bring from creative mind. some people may find new things infinitely complex and difficult to try, whereas others would take the reverse concept. some people characterize risks as more negative things since they fear from. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that creat new things and experiences as essential parts of being successful. The following reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this idea is that exciting moment and wonderful life which come from high risk stuff. it can be illustrated, that everywhere you look is full from new inventions and technologies which are creation of geniuse minds. In fact, human welfare today is actually consequence of people, whom put their life on extreme risks. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized our high demand to make and distribute more products; hence, I speaked to my dad in order to increase our investment area. At begining, he disagree with my porpuse but eventually he become positive. after a year, I achieved fantastic opportunities and make our company number one in Iran market, and win a reward from the government. thus, this opportunity wouldn't occur if I didn't take my career on the risk.
Another reason is that lots of remarkable experiences which come by any new afford. I read several articles in Iranian young start-up journal about one year ago. they analyze the various impact of risks on their life; hence, assume that they risk alot on their entire life and in all cases they defeted several time totaly. On of the articles, assumes that approximately 90 percent of young start-up people take a risk more than 12 time before becoming successful. I can remeber, my personal experience when I was studying the power electronics at Sharif university nine years ago. I tried to create a new website about organic farm product to sell them online; hence, I make extra afford and after a while, I realized that it's soon to sell things on the internet in our country. but, after five years I get significant help from my experience on the website in my new work. thus, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that every afford will be positive for us even wrong one.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, successful require to try new things and making risks. Not only, it will bringing exra exitemnt and good health, but also it will have perfect positive impacts on the human welfare. every people should make a risk to know more from their character.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tire life and in all cases they defeted several time totaly. On of the articles, assumes tha...
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...perience on the website in my new work. thus, it seems reasonable to assume from thi...
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...ngs and making risks. Not only, it will bringing exra exitemnt and good health, but also...
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... positive impacts on the human welfare. every people should make a risk to know more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in all cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91323210412 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64771491421 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56399132321 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3467621417 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.375 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2083333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.79166666667 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165937570877 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520118607295 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461751256273 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112513304993 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534166807405 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.