TPO-20:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there has been hot debate on whether people should take risks and try new things rather than staying in their comfort zone. As far as I am concerned, what would successful people do is to keep trying new things instead of only doing what they know how to do well.
First of all, risks come with opportunities, if people never take risks, they would never have opportunity to be successful or keep being successful. For example, Elon Musk, the owner of Tesla and SpaceX, was just a common guy with excellent talent when he was young. At that time, no one could expect he would become such successful entrepreneur as he is nowadays. However, because he was willing to take the risk to invest all his money into Paypal, SpaceX and later Tesla, in spite of the fact that all the other people considered it was too risky to do so, he gained the opportunity and became so successful. If Elon Musk stayed back and never took the risks in his business, those excellent companies would never exist.
Moreover, people have to keep trying new things, in order to broaden their horizon and maintain their competiveness. Especially for the successful people, if they don't keep up with the new things in the world, they will be abandoned by the society. For example, the CEO in the company that I am working for, is a middle-aged man who has never studied in university. Even though he is a very successful businessman who could afford to hire a translator, he is still studying English deligently every day, just in order to communicate with his foreign customers and employees without any barrier. I believe all the other successful people is doing the same thing, because they all understand that the competition in the modern society is very fierce, they should not satisfy with doing what they are comfortable with.
In summary, I thinks successful people will always try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well, because they have to do so to catch the opportunities and maintain their competitiveness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...ally for the successful people, if they dont keep up with the new things in the worl...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
... are comfortable with. In summary, I thinks successful people will always try new t...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, as to, for example, i think, in summary, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76404494382 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63623857398 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516853932584 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.9320233833 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3846153846 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367273712535 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143587110265 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157755031339 0.0737576698707 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314385595952 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165099122883 0.0645574589148 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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