TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans
From the dawn of civilization, we have always seek for prosperity in our life. Although there are tons of people in this world who are adept in their area, and they would be a role model for someone. To develop some the skills that could help you to dominant in this world, educations is not enough, however, the interactive skills is the key. In my perspective, I strongly agree with the statement and I would like to explain the reasons through following paragraphs.
Students have only got a concrete understanding which could be applied to some part of the real life situation. A good example, physics classes, we calculate the problems, with using some hypothesis to constraint the issues to be simple and easy to solve. However, in real situation, with no covered assumptions mean it is not true and could to somethings bad in the future. Therefore, the purpose of skills development in school is not only to make students could know how to use the tools to solve and fix the problems in the future, but also to create the new tools to decode the problems.
On the way to successful life, holding only the concrete knowledge is not adequate. Obviously, famous people who are success in their occupations have a lot of properties, one of valuable characteristics is to being friendly, this ability is crucial lead us to be shined in the spotlight, being accepted. For my experience, when I did my job for a few months, I realized that people in my workplace could not to communicate understandably, so I was assigned to be a representative for presentation to our client. I did it very well and receive praise from the client. This is the beginning of my success career, after that for only thee months presentation, I got a higher position that faster than everyone in my workplace, and I am not going to stop at this position as well.
Finally, people who is well-related with people easily tend to make a comfortable zone between them and who they talking with, the client. In fact, this lead them to create easier in negotiation for their business. With a simple for their business lead to a simple to a road of their success too.
To put it briefly, I think hard skills which is received from the school are not enough. You need soft skills like being a superb interactive person because to be friendly with someone could bring about several of benefits to you surely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'sought'.
Suggestion: sought
...he dawn of civilization, we have always seek for prosperity in our life. Although th...
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Line 1, column 470, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e reasons through following paragraphs. Students have only got a concrete unders...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... not adequate. Obviously, famous people who are success in their occupations have a lot...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...going to stop at this position as well. Finally, people who is well-related with...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...With a simple for their business lead to a simple to a road of their success too....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, finally, however, if, so, therefore, well, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69285714286 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80685405841 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509523809524 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0827215842 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171249604127 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525324086268 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339763340513 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940002125131 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279682014658 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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