Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

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Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

Sharing something to other is splendid. In Buddhist way, giving people something inthe right way could lead you to the heaven afterlife. Some people give their penny to beseecher just only because they look so pity. However, in my perspective, I strongly disagree about this because not only we might support for bad activities of bad people and also there are real people who wait us to subsidize them in many real donations.

First and foremost, giving money to homeless is mean that you support the mafia who set this fire and behind all of these fake imploreres. In my country, homelesses are going to support by our government, they would be given some simple jobs like clean the road or fire fighter supporter or other charities activities in their places. However, the beggars on the street are not the true destitute people, but they are set to be poor and asking for some money from people who pass by. In fact, the influential mafia is behind this issues. Last year, the police caught one of the gangsters and he claimed that they would kidnap some kids and force them to be the beggars, and eventually, the money they have got go to the mafia. Therefore, one way of supporting the mafia is to give the money to the beggars who are on the street.

Indeed, the homeless on the street is also one of the most criminal crime like raping which is the most unforgivable issues. Recently, our police show us that most of raping cases in our country are stemmed from the beggars on the street. That's sound terrible to hear that some people give them moneys to support rapers. Hence, reducing the miserable issues the money should not be used in this way.

So where our money should spend to? The best idea of sharing somethings to other people is donation. There are many donations which need and wait us to support them. For example, the elderly center need some moneys to buy their medical tools for old people or the orphan center need us to subsidize them in children's meal. The more money we go mean the more quality of their supportive system.

To put in briefly, supporting the homeless who live on the street is not a good idea. Because they could lead us to many unhappy problems. It's better to use our money to the verified donation center.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... live on the street is not a good idea. Because they could lead us to many unhappy prob...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, in brief, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60891089109 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29023940874 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472772277228 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2649180191 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6363636364 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228977003613 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737064949432 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502194666673 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130495431608 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392578256178 0.0645574589148 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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