tpo 26
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Selecting a job is one of the most difficult issues for all of the people because it determines their destiny. In my opinion, it is a good idea that children select a job that similar to their parents' job. Here you can see my reasons.
First, they can save their time. Nowadays, because of the economic criticism finding and establishing a job is a risky choice. People must consider all aspect and history of the job to increase the possibilIt y of becoming successful in their job. Although gathering all information is possible, it takes a lot of time. But, if they choose a job that they parents know about it a lot, they can save their time and use it for other issues.
Second, another remarkable reason is avoiding from mental disorders. All of the works have some difficulties that workers must pass them to improve to their job. Some people think to have a related education is sufficient to resolve all of the problems. They may solve them very well, but they suffer a bad situation which has adverse effects on their lives that gradually make them disappointed. In contrast, if their parents have similar knowledge that can help to their children to solve their problem easily, they might not endure the unpleasant condition. So, this choice prevents them from mental disorders.
Third, the same job improves the relationship between parents and children. By emerging the technology such as the internet, people spend most of their time for learning or finding new friends. This situation causes a gap between family members. Having the same job makes a connection between parents and children because they should spend more time for talking about the job. This circumstance increases the relationship between family. According to the research that was done at the Harvard University, 60 percent of the people; who have the same job, have a better relationship with their parents that the people who have not the same job.
In conclusion, the advantages of this choice; for example save time, keep away from the mental disorders, and improve their relationship with their parents, convince people it is a good option to elect a task which has similarity with their parents’ job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, third, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94221105528 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66446950489 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472361809045 0.524837075471 90% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5326500122 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4090909091 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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