TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that today's world complexity poses several changes in humankind' lifestyle. The involvement of parents in children education is of paramount importance for improving children's grades and scores at school. This brings up a controversial question: Is it true that parents do not engage in children's education? Some people are inclined toward the stance that people allocate a great deal of their time for children, whereas others disagree. In my perspective, I assert that parents' times are not allocated to children's learning. The reasons behind this viewpoint are discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing that comes to mind is that parents do not care about their children' education. In fact, the parents think that educating people is the responsibility of teachers and they send their children for the sake of learning new things and extending their children' knowledge. When children ask them a question regarding to their education, their response to children is that they can ask it from their teachers. Moreover, some parents currently believe that children could do other things rather than studying. They sometime persuade their children to not to have academic education by stating that having a university degree do not ensure the future career, as children may not able to find a job in the future with obtaining academic education. Therefore, all of aforementioned sentences support a claim that parents do not care about children' education.
The second and important reason that buttress my standpoint in that parent nowadays do not spend enough time with their children. Indeed, people nowadays dedicate most of their time in their career because of gaining more money from their profession. Most people work over-time until the evening. They get up early at the morning every day and go to their workplace and return late at night. Even when individuals come back from their work, they sometime perform their duties at home. Additionally, during the weekends, people dedicate their time for leisure activities such as going to restaurant or watching movie in the cinema and so forth. However, in the past, humankind were entailed more on children education. For instance, I remember, when I was a child, my father helped me in doing homework assignments during a period I was a high school student. Hence, todays' people life do not permit parents to become involved in children's education.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that human-being nowadays do not engage in children's education, because for parents, children's education is not important and because people do not have sufficient time for children. Is it not a good idea that parents spend time with their children in order to assist them to comprehend school materials? Parents consider to do that!
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider doing'.
Suggestion: consider doing
...to comprehend school materials? Parents consider to do that!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23144104803 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78996586654 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504366812227 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5865545172 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288110692836 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105356373314 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606721440971 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199867912027 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222282153472 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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